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Band 6

The plans below show a small theatre in 2010, and the same theatre in 2012.

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The maps compare the layout of the small theatre in 2010 and 2012.
Overall
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, the theatre underwent several structural changes during the two-year period.
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 the auditorium and the main entrance remained largely unchanged throughout the period, a number of facilities were relocated, expanded, or newly constructed. In 2010, the storage
room
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 was situated in the upper-left
corner
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 of the theatre and was adjacent to the dressing
room
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, which was positioned beside the stage. The auditorium occupied the centre of the building and accommodated approximately 135 seats. To the right of the main entrance was a café,
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 the administration
office
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 and the ticket
office
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 were located in the bottom-left
corner
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. By 2012, the storage
room
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 had been relocated to the upper-right
corner
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,
whereas
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 the dressing
room
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 occupied its former position. A corridor was constructed between these two facilities, and shower facilities were added next to the dressing
room
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.
Although
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 the stage retained its original position, it was expanded.
In addition
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, the ticket
office
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 was relocated to the former site of the café,
while
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 a restaurant was constructed in the bottom-left
corner
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.
Consequently
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, the administration
office
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 was moved above the restaurant. Despite these modifications, the auditorium and the main entrance remained unchanged.

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task response
Score: 8. The response is very clear and complete. To reach 9, check every place and change on the maps very carefully, and make sure no small detail is missed.
task response
The seat number is a good detail, but only use a number if it is fully clear on the plan. If it is not clear, say that the auditorium stayed the same.
coherence and cohesion
Your links are good. For an even better flow, group changes by area, for example the top part, the centre, and the bottom part of the theatre.
coherence and cohesion
The last line repeats the overview. This is not wrong, but you could use that space for one more clear map detail instead.
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You give a clear overall view and cover the main changes in both years.
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You include useful details, such as the move of the storage room, the new corridor and showers, and the larger stage.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: overall changes first, then 2010, then 2012.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Although”, “whereas”, “In addition”, and “Despite” help the reader follow the changes.
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