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The line graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.

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The graph illustrates the comparison of
wheat
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exports
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 in Australia, Canada, European Community over a
period
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 of 5 years between 1985 and 1990, with figures measured in millions of tonnes.
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, it can be clearly seen from the graph that the number of
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exports
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 in the three nations witnessed a fluctuation.
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 the figures of the European Community and Canada experienced an upward trend, the opposite trend was true in Australia. In terms of Australia,
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exports
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 increased steadily from 15 to about 17 million between 1985 and 1986. During the
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 between 1986 and 1990, there was a significant decline in
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exports
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 from around 17 to 11. Regarding Canada,
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exports
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 fell gradually by 2 from 1985 to 1986.
Wheat
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exports
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 rose substantially from 17 in 1986 to 25 in 1988. During the
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 from 1988 to 1989, there was a sharp fall in
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exports
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 from 25 to around 14.
Wheat
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exports
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 went up considerably from about 14 to 19 million between 1989 and 1990. In the European Community,
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exports
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 declined steadily from about 17 to 14 million
between
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 1985 and 1986. During the
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 from 1986 to 1990, there was a substantial growth in
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exports
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 from about 14 to around 21.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, exports, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantially" was used 2 times.
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