Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter • describe what you like about the library • say what you don’t like • make suggestions for improvements You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madan, I hope you are doing well. Thank you for reaching out
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for asking
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my suggestions to improve the quality of the library. I would like to inform you that your borrowing a book service is the best in the town I have ever had.
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is because it ensures that there is no longer a requirement
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any extra form that must be filled
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people. We can borrow a book with the card that you give, and we can track our important dates to return it.
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, there is a limited space for
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books, forcing us to check other libraries. There are many people who are struggling to find a book for their children, and as a taxpayer, I believe that our library should provide sufficient resources
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citizens. It is
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possible that
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problems may be caused by a lack of
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who
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libraries' resources rather than a lack of funds. I am looking forward to seeing the
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we really need, and I really thank you again for your team and your library management. Thank you for your time and consideration. Kind regards, Ibrahim

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Score: 6. Add two or three clear ideas for change. For example, ask for more children’s books, more space for them, and a staff member to help people find books.
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Keep the tone more formal. Do not write “I hope you are doing well” or “I really thank you again”. Use “Thank you for asking library users for suggestions” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Put each main idea in its own paragraph: one for what you like, one for the problem, and one for your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make some long sentences shorter. This will help the reader follow your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links for your ideas: “First”, “However”, “Therefore”, and “For this reason”.
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You answer all three parts: what you like, what you do not like, and what you want to change.
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Your good point about borrowing books is clear and has a reason.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main part, and closing.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “This is because”, “However”, and “rather than” to join ideas.
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