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Some people believe that exams are an inappropriate way of measuring students' performance and should be replaced by continuous assessment. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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For many years, examinations have been used to measure
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 academic performance. Even though some groups of people have an idea that
exams
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 are not the best
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 to evaluate
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 should be replaced by continuous
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instead
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. I largely agree with the opinion that
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 gives a better picture of
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students
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 progress, but
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 are still important in some situations. Continuous
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 allows teachers to evaluate
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 over a longer period of time.
Instead
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 of depending on one exam,
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 can be graded through homework, projects, class participation, and presentations.
This
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 helps reduce stress because
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 are not judged by their performance on a single day
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 helps a lot in mental health issues.
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, continuous
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 encourages
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 to study regularly rather than only before an exam.
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,
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 are still necessary because they provide a fair and equal
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 to test
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students
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 knowledge. Every student answers the same questions under the same conditions, which makes the results more reliable.
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,
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 help
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 develop important skills
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 as time management, critical thinking, and the ability to work under pressure. These skills are useful for higher education and future careers. To
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, I believe that continuous
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 is
another
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 better
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 to monitor
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 learning throughout the year.
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,
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 should not be completely replaced because they are still valuable for measuring knowledge fairly. A combination of both methods would be the most effective
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 to evaluate
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' performance.

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Task response
Score: 6. Your main ideas are clear, but add one real or clear example in each main part. For example, say how a group task can show a student’s work over time, or how one final test can compare all students in the same way.
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Make your view even clearer in the first part. You say you “largely agree”, but your end says both ways are best. Say from the start that tests should not be fully replaced; they should be used with ongoing work.
Coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Your order is easy to follow, but some long sentences join too many ideas. Split them into two shorter sentences to make your meaning clearer.
Coherence and cohesion
Use links with care. In “students are not judged by their performance on a single day which helps a lot in mental health issues”, the link is not fully clear. Write: “This can lower stress and may help students’ mental health.”
Coherence and cohesion
Keep key words the same. You use “assessment”, “ongoing work”, and “tests”. This is fine, but use “continuous assessment” more often so the main idea stays clear.
Task response
You give a clear view: you agree in part. You explain why ongoing work can help, and why tests still matter.
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You answer all parts of the question and give a clear end point: use both ways.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear shape: start, two main parts, and an ending.
Coherence and cohesion
Linking words such as “In addition”, “Nonetheless”, “Furthermore”, and “However” help the reader follow your ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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