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An increasing number of universities are replacing traditional examinations with continuous assessment throughout the academic year. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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In today's
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 evolving world, education plays a vital role in life. But traditional examinations are replaced by continuous
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 number of universities throughout the academic year. There are numerous advantages of continuous
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 as compared to traditional examinations. The main benefit of continuous
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, it helps them to relieve from
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 a number of skills in the
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cooperate with others to complete the task in the given period. The main drawback of
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 side effects on their mental health. In conclusion,
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Score: 6. Your main ideas are clear and the essay answers the question. To get a higher score, explain each idea more fully and use more exact examples.
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Make your answer to the question more direct in the first part. Say clearly that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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You need to explain why each point is important. For example, say how regular work helps a student learn more, not only get good marks.
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Give a simple example. For example: a group project can help students learn to plan work and talk with other people.
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The bad point needs more detail. Explain what may happen when many tasks are due at the same time, and why this can be hard for students.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body part. Your first body part has several ideas, so split them into shorter, clearer sentences.
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Use clear links between ideas, but do not use too many. Try: "First", "Also", "However", and "As a result".
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Some links need better form. Write "although continuous assessment can cause stress, it..." rather than "although..., but...".
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In the ending, restate your view in one clear sentence: "Overall, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because students learn all year and build useful skills."
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You give a clear view: the good points are stronger than the bad point.
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You include two good points: less last-minute study and more useful skills.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body parts, and an ending.
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Words such as "Another benefit", "Therefore", and "In conclusion" help the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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