The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram depicts the steps by which carbonated drinks
is
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are
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produced. 
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, the process consists of five stages, during which
water
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undergoes treatment, carbonation, mixing, and filtration before the finished beverages are packaged and delivered to the supermarkets.  At the beginning of the process
which
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, which
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is the
water
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cleaning stage, the raw
water
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are
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is
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collected, softened
and
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, and
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chemicals are added to the
water
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before being pumped to the next stage. In the initial part of the second phase, the material passes
trough
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through
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electric heaters, where it is heated.
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this
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, the mixture is cooled by
cooling
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a cooling
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pipe before
carbone
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carbon
dioxide is added.
Subsequently
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, in the third
step
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step,
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the carbonated
water
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is transferred into a mixing tank,
in which mixing
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where
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the colouring, syrup and flavouring
.
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are mixed.
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After
that
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that,
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the mixture is filtered before it is filled into bottles and cans during the fourth step. The process concludes with the packaging of the finished products and
distributed
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their distribution
to supermarkets.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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