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Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: - recommend a city •    suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •    give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

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Hey Jon, Nice to
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 from you! I'm looking
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forward
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 you back in Switzerland for the next 6 months.
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 we will find some time to meet.
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, I would definitely recommend
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 with us near the city of Lucern.
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However
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 we have a lot of pending work on our farm. If you like, you're very welcome
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 us a hand.
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addition
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 there are several other jobs available in Town
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 you like something else. But you can
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definitely
 live in my house
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equal if
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 you are helping or not. All the best, Paul

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Talk more about jobs. Give two or three job ideas, such as farm work, hotel work, or shop work.
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Add ideas about how to make local friends. For example, join a club, go to events, or speak to people at work.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear parts: city, jobs, and making friends. This will make your letter easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words, such as "also", "because", "for example", and "so".
coherence and cohesion
Check some word forms: "Nice to hear from you", "I recommend staying", and "I look forward to having you".
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You recommend Lucerne and offer your friend a place to live.
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You give one clear job idea: helping on the farm.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a friendly start and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
The tone is warm and right for a friend.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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