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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the monthly
temperatures
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 in three major cities,
while
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 the table displays the total
hours
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 of sunshine over a one-year period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 New York recorded the highest total
hours
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 of sunshine,
whereas
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 London had the lowest number of
hours
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.
In addition
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,
temperatures
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 in most cities showed a fluctuating trend over the period. Regarding the line graph, Sydney had a significant increase in
temperatures
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 at the beginning and end of the year, peaking at around 25°C in January and December.
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, New York and London showed a similar pattern, with their highest
temperatures
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 occurring in July at approximately 29°C and 23°C
respectively
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. With regard to the table, sunshine
hours
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 in New York reached 2,535
hours
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, and it was close to Sydney, which recorded 2,473
hours
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,
while
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 London reached the lowest total of just 1,180
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • average number of hours of sunshine
  • major cities
  • highest average temperature
  • lowest average temperature
  • temperature trends
  • annual average
  • sunshine duration
  • significant variation
  • correlations
  • overall comparison
  • variations
  • data analysis
  • visual representation
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