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The line graph shows the channel one news viewing figures per day in one year.

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The graph gives information about the number of people who watched the
channel
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Channel One
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one
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news
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 in a day over 12 months.
Overall
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, it
clear
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is clear
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 that the 6:00pm
news
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 has the most viewers,
while
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 the
one
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 at 1:00pm had the lowest.
Also
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,the 11:00pm
news
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 was just began on 1st of May. Over
one
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 year, the figures of 6:00pm
news
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 viewer had slight decline from just under 5 to approximately 3.5 millions with a lot of fluctuated throughout the period. The
one
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 at 9:30pm dropped sharply in August to reach
One
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 million. Howover, it followed by a rise
at the end
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 of the year.
Moreover
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, the 1:00pm
news
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 had stayed almost the same over the 12 months. Compares to the
one
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 which started in May has sudden increase to reach 4 millions viewers in August. But it steeply decreased from August to the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, news with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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