The pie charts display the basic reasons for moving to and from the UK in 2007.

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The pie charts display the basic reasons for moving to and from the
UK
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in 2007.
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,
it is clear that
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the most common
reason
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to move both into and out
the
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UK
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was a definite
job
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,
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however
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,
while
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the lowest one was no
reason
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stated in immigration, it was formal study in emigration.
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, in both areas, the dominant factor was a definite
job
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.
According to
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the pie chart, in the early 2000s,
the
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job
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opportunities led the way in terms of immigration, closely followed by studying.
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accompanying family and seeking employment amounted to 15% and 12% of immigration reasons, respectively.
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, the combined total of "no
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" and other factors accounted for 17% of moving to the
UK
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. In terms of emigration, a definite
job
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was
also
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the leading
reason
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,
while
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the purpose of study was the lowest
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only 4%.
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, the search for work closely followed a definite
job
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which
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it
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accounted to 22% of emigration motivation.
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this
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percentage was equal to 18% in no
reason
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stated.
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joining
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family members and other reasons comprised 18% and 14% of leaving the
UK
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in 2007,
accordingly
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, reason, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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