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The pie chart below illustrates the average commuting time of UK workers in 2009, while the bar chart compares the methods of travelling to work in London and the rest of the UK in the same year.

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The given pie
chart
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 provides information about the average commuting time of
UK
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workers
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 in 2009,
while
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 the bar
chart
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 describes the methods of travelling to
work
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 in
London
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 and the rest of the
UK
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 in the same year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most
UK
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workers
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spent
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 no more than 30
minutes
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 travelling to
work
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. In terms of
transport
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, travelling by car was the most common method,
whereas
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 public
transport
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 was the least used method. Observing the pie
chart
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 in detail, the largest proportion of
workers
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, which represented was 42
%
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had a commuting time between 1 and 15
minutes
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. Going to
the
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work
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 around 16-30
minutes
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 accounted for 33%. Longer commuting was not less uncommon, with 12% commuting for 31-45
minutes
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 and 8% travelling for 45-60
minutes
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. The smallest group, accounting for just 5% of
workers
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, spent more than an hour travelling to
work
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. Turning to the bar
chart
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, 36% of
London
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workers
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 travelled by car,
while
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 the
UK
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 constituted 73%.
By contrast
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, public
transport
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 was considerably more popular in
London
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. Around 20% of commuters travelled by train and around 18% used underground,
while
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 the figures for the
UK
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 were only about 2% and 1%, respectively. Bus travel was more common in
London
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 (around 12%). Walking accounted for 8% and 11%
,
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 in
London
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 and the
UK
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, respectively. Commuting
with
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by
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 bike was the least popular method of
the
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transport
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 in both areas, making up 4% and 4%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, uk, workers, work, london, minutes, transport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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