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Band 2.5

The internet has changed the world and how people live. It is an amazing invention. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

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great importance nowadays.If
people
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 use it in a good way.In
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examine
 the advantages of the
internet
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 and the disadvantages. On the one hand,many
people
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 think there are many benefits of the
internet
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.They say that it helps them to know new information.
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, it helps them to communicate with each other.
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, you can search
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on Google
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 to find any information you want.
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, you can send
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 to your best friend.
People
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 can learn how to draw from the
internet
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.
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,spending a lot of time in Youtub to draw
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.
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, there are some
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internet
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the internet
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 has many disadvantages.
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it leads to health problems.Second,it makes them
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lonely
 and lazy.Spending
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a long
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 time in
internet
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lead
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leads
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 to
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headache
.Third,
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the internet
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 may lead to obesity.
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 on the chair , watching tiktok and eating without doing
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exercises
 will make you fat.
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,they believe that
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the internet
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lead
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leads
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 to
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obsession
. In conclusion,there are some
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think
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who think
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 is good and others
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 it's bad.
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it's
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 a double edge weopn that should be used wisely.

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task response
Overall score: 5. Your ideas are clear, but some points need more detail. Explain why each good or bad point happens and what its result is.
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Keep your examples clear and correct. For example, say how online videos help people learn a skill, not only that they spend time on YouTube.
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Do not repeat the same idea. “Health problems”, “headache”, and “obesity” are all close. Add a new bad point, such as false news or less privacy.
coherence and cohesion
Start each main paragraph with one clear main idea. Then give an explanation and one example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with correct form: “On the one hand, ...” and “On the other hand, ...”. Put a space after commas and full stops.
coherence and cohesion
Make the conclusion short and clear. Say that the internet has both good and bad sides, and people should use it in a wise way.
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You answer both parts: the good and bad sides of the internet.
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You give clear examples, such as Google, YouTube, and TikTok.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “On the one hand”, “For example”, “In addition”, and “Finally”.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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