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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryrmouth between 1995 and present.

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The map illustrates the changes
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 Ryemouth in the year 1995 and at present.
Overall
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, the village of Ryemouth underwent a
subsequently
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 alternation. New facilities were constructed at present.
Furthermore
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, one of the areas
replaced
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was replaced
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 by
new
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a new
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 facility,
whereas
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 some fields remained
unchangeable
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unchanged
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. There is
also
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 a place that was removed. At present,
to begin
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with
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 the north-west side of
village
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the village
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new
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, new
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 residential areas were built.
New
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A new
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 road was set up. New housing was established opposite the new road.
Additionally
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,
car
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a car
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 park was built near
hotel
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the hotel
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.
On the other hand
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, the north-east side of
map
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the map
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farmland
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apply
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was replaced by
golf
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a golf
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 area. The forest park below
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also was
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was also
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 replaced by tennis. The cafe remained
unchangeable
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unchanged
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. The shop was converted into
the
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a
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 restaurant.
Fish
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The fish
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 market was converted into new apartments next to
cafe
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the cafe
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.
Furthermore
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,
fishing
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the fishing
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 port was removed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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