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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph gives information on the changes in the
share
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price
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 of Outokumpu companies between January 2006 and
December
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 2010, expressed in
euros
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.
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, it is evident that the
share
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price
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 of Outokumpu fluctuated considerably over the period, which ultimately remained unchanged at the same
price
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 in 2010. The
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 for the
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price
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 of Outokumpu peaked and increased significantly from around 12.5
euros
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 to about 31
euros
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 at the beginning of 2007. Afterwards, it gradually reduced to 22
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 in January 2008,
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 the
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 experienced considerable growth, reaching 30
euros
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 in the middle of 2008. The
share
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price
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then
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 sharply declined to around 7.5
euros
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 in
December
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 2008. In 2009, the
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 rose from about 7.5
euros
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 to 15
euros
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at
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 the middle of the year before decreasing moderately to around 12.5
euros
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 in
December
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 2009. In 2010, the
share
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price
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 grew gradually to around 17.5
euros
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 and
then
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reduced
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 to 12.5
euros
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 in the middle of the year.
Following
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this
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, the
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 remained largely stable at around 12.5
euros
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 by
December
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 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, price, december, euros, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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