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Band 4

Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be buld instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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planting
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task response
Score: 5. Your answer is on the topic and your view is clear. To get a higher score, explain why homes should be built in other places. Also, say more about why city land for trees is more important than city land for homes.
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Your example about Dammam is not very clear. Use a simple, real example: a park with many trees can make the air better and give people a place to walk, sit, and play.
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Do not use a study or a number unless you can explain it well. The “60%” point is hard to understand and does not help your main view.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Keep one main idea in each part. In the first main part, write about air and health. In the next main part, write about homes and why they can be built in other areas.
coherence and cohesion
Make each point follow this order: main idea, why it is true, then an example. This will make your writing easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Some links do not show the idea clearly. For example, use “For this reason” for a result, and use “However” when you give the other side.
coherence and cohesion
Your ending repeats your view, which is good. Make it stronger by adding one short final reason, such as: “For this reason, empty city areas should become green spaces, not more homes.”
task response
You give a clear view: trees are better than new homes in empty city areas.
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You give two main reasons for trees: they make the city look better and they give oxygen.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “On one hand”, “In addition”, “On the other hand”, and “To conclude”.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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