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Band 3

Many people feel that students should learn from online materials, while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of learning from online or
offline
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 has become widely debated.
While
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 some people believe that studying on computers is better, others argue that gaining
knowledge
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offline
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 is more appropriate.In my opinion,
Studying
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studying
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 with the help of
books
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 is
better
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a better
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 approach .
This
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 essay will discuss both views before reaching a conclusion. On the one hand, there are several reasons why pupils need to increase their
knowledge
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 by using
internet
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the internet
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.
Firstly
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, students can get more access to study materials because there are lots of websites which rapidly update their content
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 current news and technological advancements.
For Instance
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,
Some Youtube
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some YouTube
 channels are showcasing the news
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 not
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 by the news channels.
Secondly
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, increasing
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 through
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the internet
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 is more affordable than
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buying
books
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of
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 different authors .
On the other hand
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, learning
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mainly
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, mainly
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on
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from
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books
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 by attending school
classes
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classes,
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 is
also
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 beneficial.
As studying
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Studying
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 with the help of
books
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 will create a sense of discipline among the students because it will create no
distractions
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distractions,
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 like which can easily happen
by
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when
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 learning online.
Moreover
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, Materials on the Internet can be false if the author took
out
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the information from the wrong source . In conclusion , both views have their own advantages.
However
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, I believe that studying online is
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the best
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 approach because we can upgrade our skills and
knowledge
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 faster than learning
offline
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 with limited content.

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task response
Score: 5. Your answer covers all parts of the question, but some ideas need more support. For example, explain how online study is cheaper: many sites are free, but books cost money.
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Your example about YouTube news does not strongly show how students learn school subjects. Use a closer example, such as free maths or science lessons online.
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Your opinion changes. In the introduction, you say books are better. In the conclusion, you say online study is better. Choose one view and keep it from start to end.
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The point about books helping focus is good, but say why: phones, games, and messages can take students away from online lessons.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. The main order is clear, but some sentences are hard to follow because of grammar and word order. Keep each sentence short and give one main idea at a time.
coherence and cohesion
Make the first sentence of each body part state the main point. Then add an explanation and one example. This will make your writing easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use links in a more natural way. For example: “This means that…”, “For this reason…”, and “In contrast…”. Do not use too many links just to start sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Fix spacing after full stops and commas. For example, write “appropriate. In” and “conclusion, both”, not “appropriate.In” or “conclusion , both”.
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You discuss both online and printed learning, and you give your own view.
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Your main points are on topic: online learning can be cheap and up to date, while books can help students focus and avoid false information.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part form: introduction, online view, printed view, and conclusion.
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You use clear links such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “Firstly”, and “Moreover”.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • retention
  • comprehension
  • distractions
  • interactive
  • multimedia
  • engagement
  • digital eye strain
  • current knowledge
  • outdated materials
  • learning styles
  • benefits
  • challenges
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