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Some people believe that students should be allowed to evaluate their teachers to improve the quality of education. Others think this comes with unexpected consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.[491]

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 should negotiate education methods with their tutors to help get
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 got the opportunity to collaborate to
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 and immerse them in studies.
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 be misleading, As if some teachers don't like to ba told what to do or when someone recalibrates the way they perform in their jobs; and i think tutors should have the notion that it is not disrespectful from
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 to adjust the way they want to learn to make it comprehensible and apealing to them, with good manners and legitmate feedback, it'll be an advantage for both student and techers.
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, if
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 don't get a chance to evaluate
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 it might be hard for them to
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 lectures if the quality of teaching was slipshod. To wrap up, evaluating educational methods and
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quality
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, and teachers must be
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open-minded
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 teaching to gain knowledge from
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 and bulid better understanding of what is actually helpful.

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You discuss both sides and give your own view. However, the first side is not fully clear. Focus on student feedback about teachers, not on students and teachers making teaching plans together.
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Give one clear main idea for each side. For example, student feedback can show what helps them learn; however, some feedback may be unfair or based on personal likes.
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Add one short, real example for each view. This will make your ideas stronger and easier to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an opening, two main parts, and an ending. This is a good basic shape. Make each paragraph start with one clear point.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are very long and join many ideas. Use shorter sentences so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links in a clear way: “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For example”, and “In conclusion”. Do not use “on the contrary” when you mean the other view.
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Avoid repeating the same idea about teachers being open to change. Instead, explain how feedback should be given and used in a fair way.
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You give a clear final view: students should be able to give feedback on teaching.
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You understand that good feedback can help both students and teachers.
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You use paragraph breaks and clear signposts such as “On the other hand” and “To wrap up”.
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Your ending returns to the main topic and states your view clearly.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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