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Band 3.5

You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter -describe the problem -say how long it has been a problem -explain what action you want the neighbour to take

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Dear neighbour, I am writing
this
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 later to bring your attention
regarding
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 the litter you have been throwing into my dumpster area. I have been noticing it from
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 2 weeks, and just wondering to know
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 who is behind
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 behaviour.
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 suddenly one day
i
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 woke up and
find
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 out that it was you. We have been good neighbours since
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 moved
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this
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 area in 2005, and we never had any
such
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 problems. I know you should have your own problems, but it's good to share
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 we can sort
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 out. Every problem has
solution
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, once we talk and share it.
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,
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I am
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requesting you, please let me know
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 your best time to meet, and we can figure
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 out
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accordingly
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 whatever the best solution out there
.
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 Best regards Your neighbour

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task response
Be more direct about the action you want. Ask your neighbour to stop putting litter in your dumpster area and to use their own bin.
task response
Use a calm and polite tone. The line saying that you found it was your neighbour may sound too strong. Focus on the problem and the way to fix it.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main point in each part: first the problem and time, then why it matters, and last what you want your neighbour to do.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas more clearly. For example, use: 'Because of this', 'However', and 'Therefore'. Avoid long lines with many ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check small form errors that can make the letter less clear: write 'letter', 'for the last two weeks', 'I woke up and found', and 'I am requesting that you let me know'.
task response
You clearly say what the problem is: litter in your dumpster area. You also say that it has happened for two weeks and ask to meet and solve it.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. The greeting and closing are polite and fit a letter to a neighbour.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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