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The line graph shows the level of satisfaction with the health care system in four countries from 1991 to 2007.

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The line chart compares the percentage of public
satisfaction
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 with the health care system in
Canada
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, the
UK
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, the
Netherlands
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, and the US, over a
period
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 of 16 years, from 1991 to 2007.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
Netherlands
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 and the US experienced relatively stable trends.
In contrast
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,
Canada
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 saw significant fluctuations,
while
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 the
UK
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 showed a gradual upward trend over the
period
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. In 1991,
Canada
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 had the highest
satisfaction
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 rate, at nearly 60%, followed by the
Netherlands
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 closely at just under 50%.
However
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, public approval in
Canada
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 plummeted dramatically over the next 7 years, hitting a low of around 20% in 1998. During the same
period
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,
satisfaction
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 in the
Netherlands
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 remained unchanged, overtaking
Canada
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 to become the highest on the chart. By 2007,
Canada
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's figures experienced a partial recovery, rising back to 40%,
while
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 the
Netherlands
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 witnessed a slight decline to roughly 47%. Looking at the remaining countries, the
UK
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 and the US started with much lower
satisfaction
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 levels in 1991, at over 20% and exactly 10%, respectively. Both nations experienced steady increases over the 16-year
period
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. By 2007, the percentage of satisfied citizens in the
UK
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 reached nearly 30%,
while
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 the digits for the US ticked up slightly to around 12%, remaining the lowest among the 4 countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words satisfaction, canada, uk, netherlands, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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