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Some people think that e-books are the death of paper books while others think that paper books will never disappear. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Introduction
It is known that humans are creatures of habit, and it's highly arguable that the shift to technology is affecting many individuals,resulting in them rejecting the idea of it completely.
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There
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 different points that
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 to be highlighted for
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books
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 and
papers
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books
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and
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 different benefits that would support each of the above. And the choirs of agreeing or disagreeing
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 on what's in it for that
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individual
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In my
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 I think that
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books
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 will never be the death of
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 ones or
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vice versa
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 I highly agree that
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books
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 will never disappear.
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In
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 we
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 both views and it will be backed up with reasons behind it.
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Firstly
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,
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electronic
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 are an amazing tool
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 for people who have learning
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, it's
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 beneficial for
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individuals
 with hearing problems.
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It saves the environment by decreasing the waste of using
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 and cutting trees,
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 not only
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are E-books
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books
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 are helping people
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 specific needs
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also
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 saving the planet.
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Secondly
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books
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 been there
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 centuries, it was the first way of saving information and has been until these days
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, a lot of society relied
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On these informations and kept
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 safe in museums
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 it has high value.
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These days
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 people rely on the authentic method of reading
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 it's an equivalent of admiring an art piece
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 of them enjoy the smell of the
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, the leather or the cover of the book, and the feel of it.
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,
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books
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 work hand in hand with
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supporting
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 the need of the consumer
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 it's a preference rather than the idea of one
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 the other.

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task response
Make each view more full. Explain why some people think e-books may take the place of paper books, such as lower cost, easy travel, and a large number of books in one small device.
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Give one clear, real-style example for each side. For example, a student can carry many e-books on one phone, while a child may like to read a paper book before sleep.
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Your view is clear, but say why paper books will not go away in more detail. You can say that many people like the feel of paper and do not want to use a screen for a long time.
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Stay close to the question. The point about people with hearing problems is not well linked to e-books. Use points that show how e-books change reading.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: first main part for the view that e-books may end paper books; second main part for the view that paper books will stay; then give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Some parts are hard to follow because the sentences are not complete, such as “a lot of society relied / On these informations”. Keep each sentence together and make the main idea clear.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like “because”, “so”, “however”, “for example”, and “as a result”. Do not use a link word if the next idea does not fully follow it.
coherence and cohesion
Do not add a line that only tells the reader what the essay will do. Use that space to give your main answer and reasons instead.
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You give a clear view: e-books and paper books can stay together.
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You cover both sides by giving good points for e-books and paper books.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an opening, two main parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Firstly”, “Secondly”, and “In conclusion” help the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Adjustable font sizes
  • Built-in dictionaries
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Durability
  • Accessibility
  • Visual impairments
  • Tactile sensation
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Nostalgic value
  • Disconnect
  • Digital screens
  • Reading habits
  • Attentively
  • Retain information
  • Social and cultural experience
  • Economic disparities
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