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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart
illustrate
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 how the global
water
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used
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is used
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 by
sectore
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sectors
 in the world. As well, the table highlights the
number
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amount
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 of
water
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was
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used by two
diffierent
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different
 nations in the universe in 2000.
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, the agriculture sector
which
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, which
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 used the global
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water
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water,
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 was the highest one throughout the period,
whereas
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 the domestic
used
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sector used
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 the lowest one.
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 to Brazil country had a massive proportion of
population
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the population
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 who they conusumed a substantial amount of
water
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.
Initially
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, all
the
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three sectors
was
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were
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 gradually increasing from 1900 to 2000.
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 agriculture started
as
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with
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 almost 500km
consumed of
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of water consumed
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water
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 in the beginning,
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it reached
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 3000km in the end. In terms of
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector, the domestic
using
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use,
 which had approximately 250km used in 2000
year
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,
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 was lower than
it
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that
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.
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, the consumption of
water
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of
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in
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 Congo
country
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apply
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was 8m for each individual and 359m
of
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in
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 Brazil in 2000. In comparison, Brazil nation was bigger than Congo in irrigated land with 26500
km
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,
Including
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including
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 the
perecentage
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percentage
 of the
populatin
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population
 was 176 milion person.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, km with synonyms.
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