The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

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The plane illustrates the
principals
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principal
steps to produce
sugar
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from
sugar
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cane.
Overal
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Overall
, the
sugar
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cane requires time to
grown
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grow
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and
then
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five industrial stages, before becaming to
sugar
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, in the
midest
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midst
of
with
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which
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is
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juice
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its juice
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, from
wich it is extracted
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which sugar crystals are extracted
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sugar
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crystals. The process
starting
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starts
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when the
sugar
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cane
are
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is
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growing, it
take
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takes
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1 year or until
1year
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1
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and
half
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a half
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,
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years, then
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then
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the second step is harvesting, there are two
opptions
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options
,
first
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the first
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method is
cuting
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cutting
by tractors or by farmers, manually
, after
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. After
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that, the third stage is crushing,
there
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where
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the
sugar
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is became in
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becomes
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juice
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in a agrucultural machin. The next stage is
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purifying
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the
juice
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throught
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through
a filter, after that the
sugar
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juice
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is changed to
sypuf
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syrup
by evaporating, when once
this
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is done
sugar
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pass
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passes
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to
centrifuge
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the centrifuge
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, here the
sugar
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is separate in cristals,
finally
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the
last
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stage is drying and cooling.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cane
  • juice
  • crush
  • extract
  • purify
  • clarify
  • impurity
  • filter
  • heat
  • boil
  • evaporate
  • concentrate
  • syrup
  • crystal
  • crystallize
  • separate
  • crystals
  • molasses
  • by-product
  • dry
  • pack
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