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The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The picture depicts the creation of a specific type of desert called a rain-shadow.
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 there are 7 stages in the formation of the Rain-shadow desert. Starting with the winds from the sea and finishing along the Inland, crossing thousands of kilometres. In stages 1 to 5,the wind approaches the coast , and it pushes the slope upwards, as it carries moisture, which is cooled down , and it creates clouds
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 the Windward side pushes them towards the peak. There, it drops in the form of rain to the leeward side of the mountain.
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, in stages 6 and 7 and after creating rain, dry air is formed.
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 with the first step, the air is pushed downwards on the leeward side of the mountain. Dry winds reach the Inland. The desert is called a rain-shadow because it is created by rain falling at the peak of the mountain.

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