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The advantages brought by the spread of English as a global language will outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Introduction
I believe that the
increase
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increased
use
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 of
English
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 as an international
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languages
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 will
many
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 pros
that
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 cons. Given many arguments
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 my opinion.
Body paragraph 1
Most of the
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In most
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 countries
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English
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, English
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 is a normal
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, Already
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 86 countries
spoken
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.
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 is easy
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 than
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other
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, unlike Chinese.
English
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 have only 26
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, which
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use
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 to make words and sentences.
English
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 as an international
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, it is acceptable
who
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for those who
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 know
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a little
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bit
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apply
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apply
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Moreover
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, some
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been borrowing
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 from
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other
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and
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 various
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 have
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, so it is very easy to learn.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, it is a
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 of international business and jobs. It is
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language
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 of technology. If you know
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properly
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properly,
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 you can
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internet
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the internet
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better
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in a better
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 way and achieve
many
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more
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 advantages than
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others. If you have any international
interview
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, probably
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 done
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in
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. Nowadays, all the technology
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,
it
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 can be very important to learn.
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use
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 many fields
such
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 as economics, politics and education, more people will be interested study by
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.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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, many people will not
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 as a global
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, because they respect their culture,
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china
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China
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. They are very careful about their culture and ignore
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English
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the English
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language
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 as an international
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Conclusion
Conclusion, I respect all view but I think as a global
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, English
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 have many advantages than disadvantages.

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task response
Make your main view clear in the first lines. Write that you agree that the good points are greater than the bad points, and say this in a full, correct sentence.
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Give more full support for each main point. For example, explain how one shared language can help people in travel, work, study, and world business.
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The bad side is too short. Explain possible problems, such as less use of local languages or people feeling that their own language matters less. Then explain why these problems are still smaller than the good points.
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Use real and clear examples. Instead of saying “all the technology use English,” give one case, such as a person using English to read help pages for a computer or to take an online work class.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body part. Your first body part can be about learning and world talk. Your second can be about work, study, and the internet. Your third can be about the bad side.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between sentences clearer. For example: “First, English can help people talk with people from other countries. This is useful when they travel or work together.”
coherence and cohesion
Avoid very short or broken parts, such as “Given many arguments surrounded my opinion.” Use full sentences so the reader can follow your meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Your ending should sum up the two sides and repeat your view in clear words. Do not add a new idea there.
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You give a clear view: English has more good points than bad points. You also write about both sides of the question.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an opening, main parts, and a short ending. Words such as “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” help show the change of ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • communication
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • knowledge sharing
  • education
  • travel
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural imperialism
  • linguistic imperialism
  • colonization
  • identity
  • language preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • intercultural relationships
  • linguistic barriers
  • disadvantaged communities
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