The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The table illustrates data on how much
familes
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families
spent
in
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on
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their weekly
in come
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income
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between 1968 and 2018 in one country.
Overall
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, food was the main
resoures
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resource
for spending their money on
it
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in 1968,
while
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in 2018,
liesure
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leisure
was the highest figure.
In
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addition
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addition,
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fuel and power were the lowest
precentage
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percentage
in the table
,
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;
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however
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however,
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household remained
unchange
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unchanged
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in the
preoid
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period
. In 1968, Food was the highest
figures
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figure
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in the group
by
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35% of weekly spending by families, compared
double
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by
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that by
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2018. Followed by leisure was
highest
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the highest
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number in 2018 by nearly 23%, after that housing accounted
under
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for under
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20%. Fuel, power, ciothing,
footware
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apply
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and personal goods were 4%,5%, and 4% respectivialy,
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food made up 17%, housing and transport nearly 20% and 15% in 2018. Housing and clothing were both accounted for 10%,
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household goods, personal goods and transport constituated for 8%
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leisure was 9% in 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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