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The graph below shows people’s level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007.

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The given diagram illustrates the percentage of
satisfaction
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 with the healthcare among four countries-
Canada
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, the
UK
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, the
Netherlands
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, and the US over 16
years
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, specifically in 1991, 1998 and 2007
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 the level of
satisfaction
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 in the
UK
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, US and
Netherlands
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 remains relatively stable,
Canada
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 experienced significant fluctuation.
Additionally
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, the
Netherlands
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 recorded the highest proportion of satisfied citizens
at the end
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 of year,
whereas
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 the US consistently displayed the lowest level of
satisfaction
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 throughout the
years
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. In 1991,
Canada
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 registered the highest percentage of healthcare
satisfaction
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, at slightly above 60%. The
Netherlands
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 witnessed the second-highest figure, at approximately 49%.
In contrast
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, the
satisfaction
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 proportion of the
UK
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 and the US were significantly lower, standing at around 21% and 10%. Over the next seven
years
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, the
satisfaction
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 rate of
Canada
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 plunged to 20%,
while
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 the number of the
Netherlands
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 and the US remained stable at 49% and 10%, and the US saw a slight increase at 25%. Over the following 9
years
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, the data for
Canada
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 experienced a significant recovery, climbing to 40%.
Although
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 there was a minor decline in the final year, the
Netherlands
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 maintained the top position, at around 48%. The
satisfaction
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 level of the
UK
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 rose steadily to roughly 30%. The US
also
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 registered a minimal growth to end at nearly 12%, remaining the lowest rate over 16
years
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 from 1991 to 2007.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words satisfaction, canada, uk, netherlands, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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