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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar chart shows how much food and
goods
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 are bought in supermarkets in three European countries,
was
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and was
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 obtained from 1998 to 2008.
Overall
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, both food and
goods
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 saw a growth in
bought products
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the number of products bought
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 from year to year.
In addition
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, one
supermarket
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 of
country
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 A experienced a 10% in 2008, had the highest
most sellout
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sales
 in
goods
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 and foods
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while
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, while
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 the proportion of
foods and
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goods and foods
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goods
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 being bought in supermarkets of
country
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 B
has the
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apply
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was the dominant. Turning to the statistics, first of all,
Country
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 A and the two supermarkets of
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country
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Country
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 B and C saw a
most
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significant
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 rise in the percentage of foods and
goods
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 being respectively from 32% and 61% to 79% and 81% in the two years.
In contrast
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, the percentage of
the
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apply
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people who bought food and
goods
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 in
supermarket
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 A was 20% in 1998. Afterwards,
this
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 figure rose dramatically to 36% in 2008. Moving on to the second chart,
similarly
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, there was a wide margin between bought
goods
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 in the
supermarket
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 in
country
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 A
but
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, but
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 in the different years (1998 and 2008), notably, 31% to 38%,
while
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 the proportion of bought
goods
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 in
country
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 B’s
supermarket
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 rose steadily (4% to 26% to 19% in 2008). The
supermarket
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 in
Country
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 C
in
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, in
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 the category of
goods
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 & witnessed a different trend. The figure for
goods
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 was only relatively 1%
but
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, but
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 in 2008, 10%;
however
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, the figure rose to fifteen times the original value.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, supermarket, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • increase
  • rise
  • lower
  • highest
  • trend
  • shopping habits
  • convenience
  • variety
  • food
  • goods
  • local markets
  • popular
  • significantly
  • suggests
  • shows
  • countries
  • European
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