Some people believe that technology has made people's lives more complicated rather than easier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowadays,
technology
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has become a serious problem and a large number of individuals reckon that devices have made
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people
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people's
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lives more complicated rather than easier. From my
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I fully disagree with
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statement since
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can easily communicate with each other
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it can give access to new innovations.
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One main reason for
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view is that
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can find new friends or talk with them at a long distance.
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is because in the past
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to write letters and wait for weeks to get answers, which was so difficult to get new
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or just talk.
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type of communication was not excellent because sometimes
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couldn't receive answers
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,
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made our lives better as a way to achieve our goals or make new contacts from other nations,
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citizens should not wait for each question because our messages can be delivered
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. A case in point is that
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is a key for new contacts or way, where there is no limit on messages.
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Another point is that scientists can find new innovations
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help of
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there was nothing special to get and without any
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it was impossible
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new thing for society or the government.
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, now
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can easily make their prototype of innovation and show for audience, which can help to both
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public and
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because the government can choose things that will help to solve problems inside
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or outside to make
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, from engineering
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students always make models or mechanisms
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order to develop
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Conclusion
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made
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our lives
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easier compared to the past because now
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can find new friends from the US
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living in
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Central Asia
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it can help to get new innovations from public or
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private needs.

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task response
State your view in a more direct way. Say that you disagree because technology makes communication faster and helps people create new things.
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Explain each main idea more fully. For communication, show how fast calls, messages, and video chats save time. For new ideas, show how tools help people test and share their work.
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Use clear and real examples. For example, a student can speak to family in another country by video call, or a doctor can use new tools to help sick people.
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Some ideas are too general, such as technology being a key for new contacts. Say what kind of technology you mean and how it makes life easier.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending. Keep this plan, but make the first sentence of each body part state one clear idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between sentences more natural. Use words such as because, for example, as a result, and therefore only when the next sentence clearly follows from the first.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid very long sentences with many ideas. Split them into two or three short sentences so the reader can follow your point.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same key words in each part. For example, use communication, messages, and calls in the first body part; use science, tools, and new ideas in the second.
coherence and cohesion
Your ending repeats your view, which is good. Make it shorter and sum up the two main reasons without adding new details.
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You answer the question and give a clear view that technology makes life easier.
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You give two useful main ideas: easier communication and help for new ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as This is because, In addition, As a result, and For example.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • streamlined processes
  • constant connectivity
  • learning and adaptation
  • enhance convenience
  • accessible services
  • remote work
  • flexible schedules
  • work-life balance
  • evolving nature
  • 'always on' culture
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