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The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005

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The line graph illustrates three types of crime in the UK between 1970 and 2005.
Overall
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, the figure displays that three categories of offender
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 as street robbery, house burglary, and car theft.
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, car theft recorded the highest proportion among other categories. On the one hand, we can easily see that car theft have the lower number in 1970, with only 0.4 per
cent
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,
then
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 gradually increasing until reaching 1 per
cent
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 in 1990, after that sharply increasing in 19950 with roughly 1.6 per
cent
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, after that slightly decreased until returning to 1 per
cent
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at the end
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 of the period, respectively.
On the other hand
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, burglary recorded exactly 0.2 in 1970,
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 slightly increased until reaching 0.4 per
cent
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 in 1980,
then
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 started to fluctuate over the end of the period.
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,
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street robbery shows the smallest number during the period , with less than 0.2 per
cent
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 in 2005.

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