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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
proportion
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 of Australian
exports
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 to four distinct countries:Japan, the US, China and India between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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 of
exports
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 to Japan declined slightly over the
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,
whereas
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 the percentage of
exports
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 to China recorded a rapid increase.
On the other hand
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, the US and India fluctuated over the given timeframe. In 1990, the
proportion
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 of
exports
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 to Japan was
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approximately 25%,which showed its peak at nearly 26% in 1991.It
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 dropped significantly, despite some small
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 until it reached less than 20% in 2012.
In contrast
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, the
chinese
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 imports from Australia began at roughly 5% and rose dramatically until it reached its peak in 2012.
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, the
proportion
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 of indian imports started at less than
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the Chinese
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 starting point, remained stable
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 1998.It
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 increased to slightly 8%, before it dipped to
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a similar
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 ending point as the US at about 5%.
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,the US rates experienced a short range of fluctuations between 12% and 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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