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Describe a favourite game that you like? With opinion and example.

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Introduction
A favourite game gives you an experience you've never had before because of its style,
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 as action, thrill, and drama.
Body paragraph 1
In general, my favourite game is the one I play in my leisure time,
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 as King Kong. It mixes modern life with the distant past, featuring ancient creatures alongside animals
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 as gorillas, giant insects, and dinosaurs. The plot follows a crew that makes up a new, unbelievable movie, moving from the city to an unfamiliar island to film it. The hero is Jake, and the heroine is Anna.
Body paragraph 2
Jake
is
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was
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 a productive scammer before moving on to write for them.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the game is about a giant gorilla who loves Anna; he makes every effort to protect her from other species.

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task response
Give a clear answer about why this is your favourite game. You name action, thrill, and drama, but explain which part you enjoy most and why.
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Make sure the subject is a game, not a film. Your text talks about a plot, a crew, a hero, and a giant gorilla, so it sounds like the film King Kong. Add game actions, such as what you do, what you must win, and what makes it fun to play.
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Use one real example from your own time playing the game. For example, describe one hard fight, a place you liked, or a time you played with a friend.
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Explain the line about Jake more clearly. The idea that he is a scammer and then writes for the crew is not fully clear, and it does not show why you like the game.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: say the game name and your main view first; then describe the game; then give reasons and an example; end by saying why you would tell others to play it.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “First”, “Also”, “For example”, “Because”, and “In the end”. This will help the reader follow the change from the game world to the plot and your view.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea. The first paragraph can be about the game world, the next can be about what you do in the game, and the last can be your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid unclear words like “them” in “write for them”. Say exactly who you mean, such as “the film crew” or “the team”.
task response
You clearly choose King Kong as your favourite game and give some details about its world, people, and main story.
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You include your view that the game has action, thrill, and drama, which is a good start for an opinion answer.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing has a beginning, a main part, and an ending. The last part returns to the main story.
coherence and cohesion
You use some words that join ideas, such as “In general” and “In conclusion”.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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