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You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions at the college, ask him, - in which course you are intrested in. - Course cost, duration, and subjects. -Deadline of application.

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Introduction
Dear Sir or Madam,
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I am writing to enquire about the Software Automation
course
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 advertised on your college website. I have gone through the information provided, but I would appreciate some clarification as the website contains only limited details about the programme.
Body paragraph 2
Firstly
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, I would like to know the total cost of the
course
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. Could you please provide a breakdown of all the fees, including tuition charges, examination fees and study materials?
Secondly
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,
according to
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 the website, the
course
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 lasts for one year. I would be grateful if you could explain how it is structured, particularly whether it is divided into semesters or delivered as a full-year programme.
Body paragraph 3
I would
also
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 like to know more about the subjects covered. As software automation encompasses several areas,
such
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 as data migration, automation tools and test-case development, I would appreciate it if you could provide a detailed list and description of the modules included in the
course
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.
Body paragraph 4
Finally
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, could you please let me know the deadline for submitting an application? If possible, I would
also
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 appreciate a copy of the latest
course
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 brochure, including information about former students' experiences, as
this
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 would help me make an informed decision and plan
accordingly
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.
Body paragraph 5
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to receiving your response.
Body paragraph 6
Yours faithfully,
Conclusion
David Smith

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task response
You answer all parts of the task very well. You name the course, ask about cost, length, subjects, and the last day to apply. To make the email even more direct, you could put the question about the last day to apply before the extra request for a course book.
task response
Your questions are clear and useful. The request for a full list of fees is strong. The question about old students is helpful, but it is not needed for the task, so you could keep it shorter if you want a more focused email.
coherence and cohesion
The email is easy to follow. Each paragraph has one clear job: the reason for writing, cost and length, subjects, and the last day to apply. This order works very well.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “Firstly”, “Secondly”, and “Finally”. You could also use shorter links in places, for example “Also” or “In addition”, to make the writing sound less formal and less repetitive.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and ending are polite and fit a formal email. “Yours faithfully” is the right ending because you do not know the name of the person.
task response
The email gives a clear reason for writing and asks for all the key details the college needs to answer.
task response
Specific examples, such as tuition fees, exam fees, study materials, and module topics, make your questions clear.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are well planned, and the reader can find each question without effort.
coherence and cohesion
The polite tone is steady from start to finish, and the final paragraph gives a clear, professional close.
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