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Describe climate change that affect our sourranding?with opinion and example.

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Introduction
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climate
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Climate
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change
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 is a serious global issue that has been around for about 70 years. It includes changes to the global
climate
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 that
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turn
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 affect humans.
Body paragraph 1
There are a
lot
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 of causes of
climate
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change
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. Number being, which is the most dominant one, C02 emissions. The second reason is
industry
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the industry
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 in general. Now, a
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 of industrial countries produce a
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 of gases and pollutants into the atmosphere.
Body paragraph 2
Nowadays, a
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 of countries are making efforts to solve and mitigate the issue. The solutions that are being discussed are mainly promoting awareness and imposing regulations on merchants.
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, +100 country representatives hold a meeting
at
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 Paris each year to discuss
climate
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change
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Conclusion
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,
climate
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change
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 is a global issue
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 threatening
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apply
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mankind. It is addressable, but it takes several decades.

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Task response
Give your own clear view. For example, say that climate change is a very serious problem because it harms people, animals, and nature.
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Answer all parts of the topic. You write about causes and ways to help, but you need to explain more clearly how climate change affects the world around us.
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Add clear effects, such as hot weather, floods, dry land, food problems, and sea water rising. Explain how each effect harms daily life.
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Use one full example. For instance, say that in some dry areas, less rain can kill crops, so families may have less food and less money.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Make each middle paragraph focus on one main idea: causes, effects, and ways to help.
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Use simple linking words to show the order of your ideas: First, Also, As a result, For example, and In the end.
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Some ideas need more support. After you name CO2 and industry, explain why they make the Earth warmer.
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Make the Paris example more exact. You can say that many world leaders met in Paris to make plans to cut harmful gas.
Task response
You chose a very important world problem and gave causes, ways to help, and an example.
Coherence and cohesion
Your first paragraph introduces the topic, and your last paragraph gives a clear ending.
Coherence and cohesion
You use helpful paragraph breaks and phrases such as “For example” and “To sum up”.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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