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The only thing that interferes with my learning is my education” – Einstein. What do you mean by this? And do you think Einstein was correct in saying that?

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Give a clear meaning of the quote. Explain that school can sometimes stop free thought when it only asks people to remember facts and follow rules.
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Answer both parts of the task fully: what the quote means, and whether you agree. State your own view clearly and keep it the same from start to end.
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Your main ideas need more detail. Say why too much information may make learning hard, and also say how good education can help people learn.
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Use real and clear examples. For example, a student may learn facts for a test but not ask questions or try new ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make one clear idea in each body part. Start with a topic sentence, explain it, give an example, and link it back to the question.
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The second body part is not clear because it says Einstein can and cannot be right. Choose one view, or say he is partly right and explain both sides.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links with a clear job: 'First', 'For example', 'However', and 'Therefore'. Do not use many links if the idea after them is not clear.
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Your introduction has many unclear parts. Write one short sentence to give the topic and one sentence to state your view.
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Your conclusion should repeat your answer to the quote, not only say that people have different views.
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You give your own view in the introduction and try to answer whether Einstein was right.
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You try to explain the quote by talking about new research and the large amount of information people receive.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, two main parts, and a conclusion.
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You use some linking words, such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion'.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal education
  • independent learning
  • natural curiosity
  • critical thinking
  • creative thinking
  • rigid curriculum
  • memorise information
  • exam-oriented system
  • academic pressure
  • practical skills
  • question accepted ideas
  • learn from mistakes
  • encourage innovation
  • follow strict rules
  • a balanced approach
  • access to knowledge
  • develop a strong foundation
  • freedom to explore
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