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The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the cost of water across five cities in Australia, being compared by usage charge per kiloliter and average bill per household.
Overall
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, the cost of 1 kiloliter when the usage charge is up to 125KL is either similar to that of when
its
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it's
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 over 125KL or drastically more. Notably, the average bill per household is quite
similar
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similar,
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other than
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except
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 in
Melbourne
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. Looking at the details, one kiloliter costs roughly the same in Brisbane($0.81 and $0.84),
Melbourne
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(both $0.78) and Sydney(both $0.98).
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, the charges in the other cities are double or even triple when over
125KL
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125KL.
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,
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apply
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 In
Adelaide
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Adelaide,
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 it rises from $0.42 to $1.00 and in Perth
from
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, from
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 $0.42 all the way to $1.50. Meanwhile, the utility rates don't fluctuate that much. Specifically, they range from $253 in
Melbourne
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which
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, which
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 is significantly lower
to
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, to
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 $310, $312, $319 and $332 in other cities.
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, we can see that they are all within one price range except for
Melbourne
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words melbourne with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost of living
  • urban infrastructure
  • utility rates
  • supply and demand
  • metropolitan areas
  • water consumption
  • price variation
  • tariff systems
  • economic factors
  • budget allocation
  • household expenditure
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