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The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given logical pie chart, table and bar chart collaboratively provide the information of a library in Little Chalfont between 2007 and 2016,
categorized
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 into three main areas. Figures are given in percentages and
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number
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the number
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 of
loans
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that middle ages got the highest
number
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 of library
membership
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memberships
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 in 2016,
while
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the
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most of the
loans
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 were bought for
children’s
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 and
audit
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audiobook
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 fiction. Apart from that,
a
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slight fluctuations can be seen in
total
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the total
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number
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 of
loans
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beween
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between
 2007 and 2017. To
beign
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begin
, young adults and senior citizens
remained
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had
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 the least
number
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memberships
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of memberships
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at the end
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, which reported 12% and 15% respectively. More interestingly, children secured the third
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highest membership proportion at 22%,
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 (18-64
) ages
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 averaged at 51%, which was just two times larger than
children’s
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. Moving on to the
loans
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 categories, both
children’s
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 and audit fictions averaged 38%,
while
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children’s
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DVD
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DVDs
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 maintained the lowest at 1%. It is worth noticing that
,
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 the total
number
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 of
loans
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 stood at just over 15,000 in 2007,
then
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,
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 gradually rose above 20,000 in 2010, and managed to
secured
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 the rate over
next
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the next
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 three years. In comparison,
depite
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despite
 the slight
dropped
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drop
 in 2013, it increased
to
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again above 20,000
at the end
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 of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, loans, children’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall
  • in general
  • the most
  • the least
  • higher
  • lower
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • drop
  • share
  • number
  • rate
  • group
  • age
  • men
  • women
  • books
  • children
  • adult
  • more than
  • less than
  • about the same
  • compared with
  • while
  • whereas
  • accounted for
  • made up
  • remained stable
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