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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart and the part chart
illustrates
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 the location and the
catagories
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categories
 of
dance
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classes
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 young
prople
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people
 in a town in Australia are participating in recent days.
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, most of the
dance
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classes
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 are located at private
studios
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,
while
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 the
least
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fewest
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 are situated at college-based
studios
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. Apart from that,
students
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 under 11 prefer taking ballet
classes
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. Meanwhile, most of
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students
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the students
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 whose ages are from 11 to 16 years old tend to
atted
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attend
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 modern
classes
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. Most
of
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dance
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classes
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 are held in private
studios
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,
setting up
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accounting for
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 48 percentage point. Community halls and other
,
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apply
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 school halls account for 18
percents
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per cent
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 and 24
percents
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per cent
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, respectively. College-based
studios
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holds
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 the least proportion, setting up 10%. To elaborate,
students
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 who are under 11 and who are from 11 to 16 years old have different
taste
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tastes
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 in the types of
dance
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classes
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. There are 600
students
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 participating in ballet
classses
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classes
,
while
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 the number of tap and modern
classes
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 is approximately 450 and 300, respectively.
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,
elder
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older
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students
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 prefer modern
classes
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 the most. Modern
classes
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 have around 510
students
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,
while
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 tap and ballet
classes
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 have 410 and 300
students
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, studios, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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