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Writing Samples
Band 4

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and services. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter Give details of your visit

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 to appreciate the services of your
restaurant
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, which we
experience
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experienced
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 during our recent visit.
Firstly
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,
i
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I
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 made a birthday celebration reservation via phone, your representative was very helpful and well aware of
pre booking
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pre-booking
 procedures. Upon arrival at
entrance
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the entrance
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, we were welcomed promptly
,
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apply
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 and escorted to
dining
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the dining
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 area.
Secondly
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, ambiance of
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restaurant
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the restaurant
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 was splendid,
background slow
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the slow background
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 music was adding to
vibe
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the vibe
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. Food was well served
and
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, and
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 its taste was exceed expectation.
Restaurant
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 staff made my birthday celebration even more memorable by gifting
almond
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an almond
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 cake.
Additionally
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, my friends were mighty impressed by
service
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the service
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 provided by
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restaurant
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the restaurant
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. They are planning to celebrate their events at
same
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the same
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 place. Thanks again for providing fully professional services. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Adeel

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task response
Add key facts about the visit, such as the date, the number of friends, and the special day. This will make the letter more full.
task response
Say clearly why you are writing in the first line, for example: “I am writing to thank you for the wonderful meal and service.”
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: booking, arrival, food, and staff. Use simple links such as “Also” and “Finally” to join them more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each part. For example, put all food details in one part and all staff details in another.
task response
You describe the booking, welcome, food, cake, and staff service. These details show why you were pleased.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, main parts, thanks at the end, and a polite close.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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