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The diagrams below show the changes that took place in a town called Bridgetown between 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps show the transformation of the
place
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 in a town named
Bridgetown
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 between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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,
Bridgetown
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 experienced significant development over the 300-year period.
While
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 the
market
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marketplace
place
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, woods, bridge and several roads remained unchanged, the castle was replaced by a school, and new residential and transport facilities were introduced. In 1700,
Bridgetown
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 offered
limited
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a limited
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 range of places and
surrounded
Verb problem
was surrounded
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 by farmland.
In
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On
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 the northern
side
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side,
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 there was a market,
while
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 woods were located in the
central
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centre
 of the area
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 a castle stood
at
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to
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 the east. A river
run
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runs
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 through the central area, and a bridge stood at the middle of the centre and
connected
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connects
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 the roads. Most of the remaining land
were
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was
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 used for farming. In 2000, several major changes had taken
place
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. Most notably, the castle has been demolished and replaced with a new school.
In addition
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, a railway line was constructed running from the north-east.
Market
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Marketplace
place
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 remained unchanged in
north-west
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the north-west
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,
while
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 buildup areas was develpoed with several houses to the west of the river.
Furthermore
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, a bypass was built around the
residental
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residential
 area and across the
sothern
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southern
 part of
the
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apply
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Bridgetown
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, bridgetown with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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