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Two maps show the change of a coastal town, called Pentland, from 1950 to 2007.

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The maps illustrate the difference between a coastal town called
Pentland
Use synonyms
 in 1950 and 2007.
Overall
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,
Pentland
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 developed into a residential
area
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 with commercial and business facilities,
while
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 the industrial
area
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 no longer existed. In 1950,
Pentland
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 was an industrial
area
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 without many facilities except a car park. The changes could be seen in every part of the
area
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. The sea located on the northern side of
Pentland
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 was developed into a yacht marina. The apartments were built on the east side of the marina. The empty road became a commercial
area
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, where shops were built along the side of the roads stretching from east to west. The shops
also
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 replaced the former car park
area
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. In the eastern
area
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, where
grassland
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the grassland
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 used to be located, houses and a cinema were developed.
Finally
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, the industrial
area
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 was reconstructed into a multi-storey car park, and a swimming pool was added near it.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pentland, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal town
  • layout
  • undeveloped
  • infrastructure
  • landmarks
  • rural
  • significant changes
  • tourist attractions
  • residential areas
  • housing estates
  • tourism-driven economy
  • green spaces
  • beachfront properties
  • coastline
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic growth
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