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With an increasing population communication via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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Introduction
There is no hesitation that
technology
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 is taking over our lives
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nowadays
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 communication is one of them. And by
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I 100
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 agree that electronics
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 made things easier
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 as communication , studying and jobs , etc.
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 people prefer communicating over the phone
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rather than
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 having to meet up every
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 have to say something to each other. I for sure believe
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 made
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 lives easier
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 you dont have to meet the company owners face to face for a big deal , you can easily face
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 or start a meeting on zoom , that way you are saving
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 and gas , But elders will forever do it the old way
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 teenagers think its smart and saves
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 , you dont have to meet your friend to have a conversation when they are a phone call away and thats why i love
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 understand old
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 have to say these
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 everything is easy and smart ,
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nowadays
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 everything comes to you when
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 just sitting at home and chillling and
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task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Say if you agree fully or only in part, and explain why.
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Your main idea is clear: online talk saves time and makes life easier. Add one more side: face-to-face talk is still needed for family, close friends, and important talks.
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The meeting example is useful. Make it more real: online meetings can help people who live far away, but big deals may still need people to meet in person.
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Do not only say that technology is good. Answer the key idea in the question: will face-to-face talk become a thing of the past? State clearly that it will not fully disappear, or explain why you think it will.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction, one paragraph on online talk, one paragraph on why face-to-face talk remains, then a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one clear main idea. For example: “Online communication is useful because it saves time.”
coherence and cohesion
Use link words carefully: “First,” “For example,” “However,” and “In the end.” This will make the ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid very long sentences joined by commas. Write shorter sentences so each idea is clear.
coherence and cohesion
End with a direct final view. For example: “Online communication will grow, but face-to-face communication will still be important.”
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You give a clear personal view and stay on the topic of technology and communication.
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The example of online work meetings is relevant and helps show how internet communication can save time.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has separate paragraphs for your opening, example, and final thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful link words, such as “For example,” “Although,” and “on the other hand.”
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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