The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » »

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This
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table indicates the worldwide mobile phone
market
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between the years 2005 and 2006, by different phone companies. What stands out is that Nokia has not only been the
market
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leader in 2005,but
also
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could improve its leadership
position
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by 2006. They produce a little bit over 1/3rd of the entire
market
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.
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makes
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Motorola
the second in
position
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,
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they could
also
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improve their
position
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and are clearly number two in the
market
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. In comparison, Samsung
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lost a little of its sales
position
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in 2006 and is
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now third behind Nokia and Motorola.
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there is a smaller
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which is shared between Sony Ericsson, L.G. and BenQ Mobile
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are all selling bellow 7.4% and all of them have lost
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positon
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position
except Sony Ericsson, which managed to sale 1.1% more
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then
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in the previous year.
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, the
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is clearly dominated by Nokia, which holds the biggest place and sells 35% of mobile phones to the entire consumer
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. Behind
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are only two players, which are Motorola and
Samsung
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Samsung,
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that
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hold strong positions
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after that the
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is
share
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shared
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between many minor players.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words market, position with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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