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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •Explain why you want to take time off work •Give details of the amount of time you need •Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear
madam
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, I want to inform you that I need off from work for some time. Recently, I discussed with you that I got my work permit after completing my
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study
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studies
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. Now, I am planning to get permanent residency. So, I need some time to
study
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 my language testing program. I am requesting
you that I need
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that you allow me
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 almost 2 months
for
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study
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. So, I can prepare well and clear the exam in one attempt.
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, I do not want to give you
hard
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 time. So, I am available for four days
in
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apply
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a week to help you. I need three days
in
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a week to
study
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. І hope you understand my situation. Yours
Sincerely
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, Navpreet Kaur

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Give the exact days or dates you need away from work. Also say when you will return.
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Explain your plan for work in more detail. Say which tasks can be done by another worker and what you will finish before you leave.
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Use a more polite work tone. For example, ask if your manager could approve your plan.
coherence and cohesion
Put your request in a clear order: reason for leave, time needed, then work plan.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each paragraph. Add a clear opening and a polite final request.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words such as 'First', 'Also', and 'Finally' to help the reader follow your ideas.
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You explain why you need time: you want to study for a language test for your residency plan.
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You give a clear idea of the time you need and offer to work four days each week.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has separate parts for the reason, the time needed, and your work plan.
coherence and cohesion
You use a suitable greeting and ending for a letter to a manager.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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