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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.

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The provided pie charts illustrate the average
food
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 consumption in the world , and it is compared to the two countries, India and China.
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, the most consumed
food
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 was processed
food
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and
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 the least consumed
food
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 was
nuts
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 and
seeds
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 in China and India.
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 the largest population of the world consumes processed
food
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 the most, at 41%.
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, people in the whole world used fruits and vegetables and Animal
food
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 around 29% and 26% respectively.
Nuts
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 and
seeds
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 stand at a low percentage of 4%.
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, in China ,the second most consumed
food
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 was vegetables and fruits , at 32%. In India, the second most used
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 was surprisingly animal
food
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, having a percentage of 27%. The Chinese people consumed
Nuts
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 and
seeds
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 around 19% , and 11% Indians consumed
Nuts
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 and
seeds
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, nuts, seeds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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