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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar and table graph illustrates the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 studying in four different countries that use English as their main language in 2004 and 2012.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of people learning in the
USA
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, the UK,
Australia
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, and Canada increased.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 overseas in the
USA
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 was the highest in 2004 and 2012 compared to other countries.
In addition
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, based on the total
percentage
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 of
students
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,
Australia
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 had the highest rate. As can be seen, foreign
students
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 in the
USA
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 increased significantly from around 150.000 in 2004 to nearly 250.000 in 2012, making it the
country
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 with the highest
number
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 of foreign
students
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. All remaining
country
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 has similar
trend
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 from 2004 to 2012; the UK,
Australia
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, and Canada grew from 110.000 to 200.000, 110.000 to 190.000, and 40.000 to 60.000, respectively.
Furthermore
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, based on the
percentage
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 of total
students
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 in each
country
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,
Australia
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 is a
country
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 with the highest rate of overseas
students
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 at 19% in 2004 and 24% in 2012.
In contrast
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,
although
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 the
USA
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 had the highest
number
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 of foreign
students
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, it seems that the
percentage
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 of it comparing to
total
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the total
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 student
number
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 is quite low, only 2% in 2004 and 2012. Meanwhile, both in the UK and Canada, the
percentage
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 is around 5% to 13%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, usa, australia, percentage, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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