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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? -> google places

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Introduction
Many
people
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 interest in searching the
history
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 of the house they live in. Holding many reasons why and where, based on these
interests
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 the
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 of sites regarding the
history
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 of each property increased.
This
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 of properties.
Body paragraph 1
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certainty
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comfort in knowing everything
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, huge
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knowledge
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, a recent report stated how
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 find enjoyment in searching
history
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, background informations and other stuff.
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, being
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serious
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nowdays
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nowadays
 are
intrested
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interested
 in finding out about their
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properties
.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, another notable question is how
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people
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their
propertys
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properties
. So, there are many different websites that
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focus
 on finding the
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 of properties.
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, a significant
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 of
people
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google places
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number
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one
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 website for finding your property
history
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. In
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addition
, after many endless searchings I found that it is indeed the
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one
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 website for these researchs is
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google place
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Google Places
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 with a
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 of 1 billion website
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visitors
 in the past 6 months.
Thus
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,
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google places
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 might be the place where
people
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 search
about
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history
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 of houses and buildings.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the increased
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 of property researchers might be caused by
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seriousness
.
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Furthermore
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 a
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majority
 of
people
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 we found that
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google places
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 is
one
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 of many websites that can find the
history
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 behind the place you live in.

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Answer both parts in a more full way. Give two clear reasons, such as wanting to know who lived there before, or wanting to know if the home has a special past. Then give several real ways to find this out.
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Explain each main idea. Do not only say that people are curious. Say what they may want to know, for example, the age of the house, old owners, or past events there.
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Use examples that fit the question and are easy to trust. The claim about one billion visitors and the report are not explained, so they do not make your point strong. You can use simple examples such as asking old people in the area or looking at town records.
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Be careful with Google Places. It may show a place on a map, but it is not usually the best way to find the full past of a house. Better sources are old maps, local offices, library papers, land records, old news, and past owners.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. Keep this shape, but make each body part focus on one clear idea.
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Make the first body part only about reasons. Make the second body part only about ways to research. This will help the reader follow your answer.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words used in the right way: 'First', 'Another reason', 'For example', 'Also', and 'In conclusion'. Avoid unclear links such as 'Holding many reasons why and where'.
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Use clear topic sentences. For example: 'One reason is that people want to know who lived in their home before.' Then add an explanation and an example.
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You answer both the reason and the research parts of the question.
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You give curiosity as a reason, which is a relevant idea.
coherence and cohesion
The essay uses paragraphs and has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as 'To begin with', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' show the order of your ideas.
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