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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart and table depicted the number of
students
Use synonyms
 studying from abroad in four
english
Capitalize the proper name
English
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 countries in
period
Correct article usage
the period
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of
Change preposition
from
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 2004 to 2012.
Overall
Linking Words
, the highest number of
students
Use synonyms
 who live in English-based
coutries
Correct your spelling
countries
 showed America
in
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at
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 the end of
years
Correct article usage
the years
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,
while
Linking Words
 in
early
Correct article usage
the early
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 years
American's
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American
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 people
showed
Correct word order
also showed
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also
Linking Words
 great numbers compared to other countries. In
term
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terms
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 of foreign
students
Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
as a percentage
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percentages
Add a comma
percentages,
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 the
Americans
Correct word choice
American
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students
Use synonyms
 showed identical results
through
Change preposition
from
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 2004 to 2012 (2% respectively). The United Kingdom
illustrated
Verb problem
received
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 100
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
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 from abroad, but in 2012 the
numerous
Check wording
number
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 of youngsters
rose doubly
Verb problem
doubled
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 (200
students
Use synonyms
).
Moreover
Linking Words
, in
2004
Punctuation problem
2004,
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 the UK and Australia registered
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 results by
students
Use synonyms
. And
then
Linking Words
 in 2012
Correct word order
, Australia also
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also
Linking Words
 Australia increased
number
Correct article usage
the number
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 of
students
Use synonyms
 to
200
Correct word order
approximately 200
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students
Use synonyms
 approximately.
Additionally
Linking Words
, Canada
figured
Verb problem
had
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 the smallest comparisons in 2004 (5%), and in 2012 compared slightly
incresed
Correct your spelling
increased
 to 7%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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