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More and more people prefer to read ebooks. What are the reasons for this? What problems can this causes for the libraries?

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Introduction
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centuries
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centuries,
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people
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are
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 attracted towards the literature. In
oldtimes
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old times
, physical
books
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 were preferred, but nowadays folks are shifting more towards the ebooks.
This
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 essay will be focused on the causes for
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 phenomenon, and the impact
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that it can have on libraries
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libraries
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 it can have.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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books
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are
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 the primary source of knowledge for human beings
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since
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ancient times. In past,
knowledege
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knowledge
 was compiled on stones ,and after some
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time,
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this
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 depiction started in the form of cave paintings. As the wheel of time turned,
philosphers
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philosophers
 started compiling
books
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.
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 was the moment when the common
people
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 came into contact
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 source of enlightenment, but it was limited to only one particular section of society. In
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the present
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 time, the advancement of technology
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has brought
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this
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 literature in the form of ebooks
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within
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 the reach of everyone. Paperbound booklets were heavy
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 and expensive
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however
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however,
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 the digital
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 are inexpensive , and they
donot
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do not
 require extra space, as they can be downloaded
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 a laptop
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or even in the mobile phone.
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, a publisher charges
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 amount for
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a paper
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 edition, but a digital copy costs
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 as compared to
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the prior
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.
Body paragraph 2
Moving
further
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,
this
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 trend has shifted
people
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 away from
libraries
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. Decreased
foot-fall
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footfall
 can bring the revenue down ,as compared to what they generated in past. There is one more problem apart from memberships, the
books
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 sitting on the shelves can lead to
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stagnant capital.
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libraries
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 used to buy
books
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 in bulk
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for renting, but when no one is borrowing ,
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 they are just a struck inventory.
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, if
libraries
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 are renting e-
books
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,
people
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 might find them cheaper online. The rise of e-
books
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 will certainly bring issues for these public institutions.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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if
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libraries
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 have to survive in
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 phenomenon, they have to work on diiferent approach.

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task response
Answer both parts in a more direct way. Give two clear reasons why people choose e-books, such as low cost and easy use, then give two clear problems for libraries, such as less money and less need for printed books.
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Keep the first main part on the topic. The long story about stones, cave art, and the past takes up too much space and does not fully explain why people now choose e-books.
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Explain each point more fully. For example, say that one phone can hold many books, so people can read while they travel and do not need to carry heavy books.
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Make the library problems more exact. Libraries may have fewer people, less support from the public, and costs when they need to buy both printed books and e-book use rights.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simpler four-part plan: introduction, reasons for e-books, problems for libraries, conclusion. Your essay mostly follows this plan, but the first body part spends too long on history.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with a clear main idea. Then add one or two short explanations and one example. This will make the reader see your point more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. Words like “To begin with” and “Moreover” help, but some links are not clear, such as “Moving further.” Use simple links like “First,” “Also,” “As a result,” and “In conclusion.”
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence joins clearly to the next one. For example, the move from the history of books to e-books is too fast. State the link: new tech has made books cheaper and easier to get.
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You discuss both the reasons for e-books and the problems that libraries may face.
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Your points about lower cost, less space, fewer visits, and books left on shelves are on topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, two main body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use examples to support ideas about book cost and library books that are not borrowed.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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