You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter • say why you enjoy walking and where • describe the litter you have seen on your walks • suggest what might be done about the problem Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam I have been enjoying long walks in the
near
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countryside for years. Admiring the thriving nature is a great pleasure. I love observing wild animals roaming around and
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pictures of them. It is my passion
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it gives me much happiness. The countryside is a place where I can forget about the problems of my everyday life. I am sure that it brings everyone joy.
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recently I have started noticing large piles of rubbish being left around the place. I have found enormous amounts of plastic bags, bottles, containers and even
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. Not only does it destroy the beauty of the countryside’s landscape, but it
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destroys the delicate environment of the place. The litter can be dangerous to animals. I have found things
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as gasoline containers. The problem has to be dealt with
immidiately
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immediately
. I would support having people pay fines for
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leaving
the rubbish in
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places. The town council could
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set up cameras
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to catch
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people. Another way of dealing with the problem could
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be sending police patrols to control the situation. I hope my proposition will be considered Sincerely, XYZ

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task response
You answer all parts of the task: why you walk, what rubbish you see, and what should be done. Add a little more detail about the exact place, such as a park, wood, or path near your home.
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Your ideas about fines, cameras, and police are clear. Explain how one of these plans could work, for example who would check the cameras or where signs could be put.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: the place, the problem, and your ideas. This makes it easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words between ideas, such as “For this reason”, “Also”, and “As a result”. This will make the letter flow better.
coherence and cohesion
End with a full closing sentence, such as “I hope you will consider these ideas and help keep our countryside clean.” Then write “Yours faithfully” because you do not know the name of the person.
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You give good examples of the rubbish, such as bags, bottles, containers, and tyres. This shows the problem clearly.
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You explain that rubbish can harm animals and spoil the beauty of the area. These are strong reasons for action.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear job, so the reader can follow your message without trouble.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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