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It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college. Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter • say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise • explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way • describe what help you need to organise this event Dear ....................................,

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Dear Risham, Good morning! Long time no see, hope
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 doing well. Do you still remember me? I am
singing
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 genius, that was a nickname you gave me 13 years ago.
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, for sure. I miss you so much! As you know, we were
left
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 college for about 10 years. So I want to celebrate
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 10th anniversary with our
classmate
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 and friends. Honestly, I
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 know what
should we
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we should
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 do at first: but I remembered that in the
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 month of our college lives, Jessica let us
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 a
letter
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 to
the 10 years later’s us
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us 10 years later
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. I think
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letter
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 can be the theme of our anniversary.
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, we can bring some gifts to our
firends
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friends
 and classmates.
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 will be a great chance to remind our
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enjoyable
 and lovely
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 school lives. I’m really curious about the
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, I can’t remember anything
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 the
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. I really hope I did not write nay embrassing events.
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, could you please help me to contact
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Jessica and ask her about the letters? If you
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 I will really appreciate that. Meanwhile, I’m going to contact
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Jasmeen and Annie, they were the “Social Queen” of our school; they might can help us to contact
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our classmates and friends.
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 we can build a group chat to discuss the details of our 10th anniversary. Talk to you later! I really want to say that again: I really miss you! See you later! Your Bestie, Singing Genius.

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Say the event plan more clearly. For example, give the place, day, food, and main parts of the day. This will make your plan easier to see.
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Explain more about why the old letters are a good theme. You could say that they will help everyone remember their hopes and time at college.
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Your request for help is clear, but ask your friend to do one or two clear jobs, such as call Jessica and find the letters by a set day.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: say why you are writing, describe the event, give reasons, ask for help, and close the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas are joined in very long sentences. Use shorter sentences and simple link words such as “First”, “Also”, “Because”, and “Then”.
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Keep each paragraph on one main idea. The first paragraph can be only a warm hello, and the next one can start the event plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same name for the event. For example, write “our ten-year college meeting” each time, not “anniversary” and “school lives” in the same way.
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You answer all the main parts: you give an event idea, say why it is special, and ask for help.
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The idea of reading letters from college is warm and personal. It makes the event feel special.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear opening, main part, and friendly ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful time words such as “Meanwhile” and “Then” to show what will happen next.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plan
  • party
  • get-together
  • friends
  • old
  • ten years
  • college
  • place
  • date
  • time
  • invite
  • guest
  • budget
  • money
  • cost
  • food
  • drink
  • cake
  • music
  • talk
  • share
  • memory
  • story
  • photo
  • wall
  • help
  • join
  • come
  • together
  • nice
  • easy
  • small
  • warm
  • soon
  • let me know
  • thanks
  • see you
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